Image from Dark Uncle
You may be a grammatical black belt, leaping big vocabulary words in a single bound. But take care: you could still be making elementary mistakes that’ll leave your readers cringing, eye-rolling, and yes, even face-palming.
image by K Kendall
Two attractive people meet. Adventure ensues. They get shot at together. One or both of them shares a moving past experience with the other. Suddenly, it’s love.
Sound similar to the romance in your story? Sorry, it’s also the romantic subplot in pretty much every action movie.
The unbearably schmaltzy story is back – now edited according to your suggestions!
Big stuff that changed:
- I kept the Times job, but gave our heroine a little more control over her emotions
- I made up a specific memory from the relationship to be more showy, less telly
A little piece of fiction that’s been hanging in my head for awhile. It’s too long and too schmaltzy, but I don’t have time to shorten it – and we’ll just chalk it up to the self-indulgence of the hopeless romantic, eh? Constructive criticism welcome.
Photo by Chris Costes