Voice Week 2013: Thursday

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In the home stretch now!

“I’m sorry, I’m sorry…Yes. I knew they were seeing one another. I knew my son was in love with her. He always was. They both were, since they were little, chasing after that girl. I always knew it was my Will who would win her in the end. They’re both good boys, but Hank, he’s always had a wild streak. And she’s a nice girl, good head on her shoulders. And Will’s such a good…was a good boy. God, why would he do this? Oh, my boy. I just want him back. God, I want him back.”

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12 Comments

  1. Whirl of emotions. Shame, guilt, grief, shock, disbelief… Sounds like a mother rather than a father. Makes my heart ache.

  2. I wonder if this one’s assessment of Hank’s feelings are correct, because I can see that read into what he said, but it could go either way. Now I’m just trying to decide if it’s suicide or murder-suicide.

  3. This is so real, it’s great…just reading something this raw is a privilege. I wish there was more like it in the world.

  4. Fast-paced and desperate. The mother trying to get a grip on her emotions. What’s Hank gonna say tomorrow?!

  5. A heart-wrenching piece, particularly in the slip of her tongue — forcing herself to turn present tense into past.

    But man, I am so hyped for tomorrow! Will a dark secret be revealed… Or will it really be the tragedy of a man who took his own life?

    *dramatic violins*

  6. This totally opens up new questions. I’m not convinced it was a simple suicide anymore! And this poor sad person 🙁 My heart feels sad for them.

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