Voice Week 2012: Thursday

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Voice number four for the prompt “rained out picnic.”

"Today my voice is ______."

She kept waking up to check the forecast on her phone. Little green pixel clouds were jerking across the map with fun-killing rhythm – like the theme from Psycho. She cussed out the screen. Didn’t help. By the a.m. the sky was oozing out gross beads of cloud sweat. She almost chucked her phone at the wall. That stupid party was the only cool thing she had planned all summer. Co-ed and unsupervised. Glow sticks and guitars. Diet Coke and Mentos. Nixed by bleeping weather. EPIC FAIL. 

What type of story does this feel like to you? When does it take place? Tell me in the comments!

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Stephanie is an award-winning copywriter, aspiring novelist, and barely passable ukulele player. Here, she offers writing prompts, tips, and moderate-to-deep philosophical discussions. You can also find her on and Pinterest.
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18 Comments

  1. Wow. Any more teen-angst and my head might explode. The dates on this one should be a no-brainer, even for me. 🙂

  2. cloud sweat..what a great line.

  3. definitely set in the present. You hit all the perfect details for a self absorbed teenager

  4. Text speak, coded language of the modern juvenile. Definitely moved forward a few centuries.

  5. I almos said college, but this seemed more teenager/high school student. Though… I do talk like this sometimes. No judgement. 🙂

  6. Definitely a teenager — I’d say either a girl just out of tween-hood, or perhaps simply a self-indulgent sixteen year old. And, of course, absolutely consumed by the age of technology. “EPIC FAIL” gave me a giggle. 😉

  7. A rich teen brat of a girl I think! Set in the current times of course.

  8. Definitely a teenager and a not very happy one.
    This voice seems to have bought us unexpectedly (for me at least) into the modern age.
    Looking forward to day 5.

    • Yup! I almost posted this one first as sort of a “control” to explain what’s going on in the others, but per my brother’s advice posted them in chronological order. Not sure how I feel about that decision now. Hmmmm…

  9. Love, love, love this voice. Very different from the previous, almost Biblical three. This piece has a more modern feel to it, and the word choice really highlights the character’s disdain for rainy days, from describing rain as “cloud sweat” to freaking out about the forecast.
    =)

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