Voice number four for the prompt “rained out picnic.”
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She kept waking up to check the forecast on her phone. Little green pixel clouds were jerking across the map with fun-killing rhythm – like the theme from Psycho. She cussed out the screen. Didn’t help. By the a.m. the sky was oozing out gross beads of cloud sweat. She almost chucked her phone at the wall. That stupid party was the only cool thing she had planned all summer. Co-ed and unsupervised. Glow sticks and guitars. Diet Coke and Mentos. Nixed by bleeping weather. EPIC FAIL.
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What type of story does this feel like to you? When does it take place? Tell me in the comments!
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Wow. Any more teen-angst and my head might explode. The dates on this one should be a no-brainer, even for me. 🙂
Ha! Yes. This one is sort of the “control” piece against which we can compare all the others.
cloud sweat..what a great line.
Thank you! I was rather proud of that.
definitely set in the present. You hit all the perfect details for a self absorbed teenager
Thanks! That’s what I was going for.
Text speak, coded language of the modern juvenile. Definitely moved forward a few centuries.
Oh yes.
I almos said college, but this seemed more teenager/high school student. Though… I do talk like this sometimes. No judgement. 🙂
Haha, me too, me too. Sometimes it’s necessary for emphasis!
Definitely a teenager — I’d say either a girl just out of tween-hood, or perhaps simply a self-indulgent sixteen year old. And, of course, absolutely consumed by the age of technology. “EPIC FAIL” gave me a giggle. 😉
Yup! You got it.
A rich teen brat of a girl I think! Set in the current times of course.
Teen brat, yes. Not necessarily rich. Rich enough to have a smart phone, though.
Definitely a teenager and a not very happy one.
This voice seems to have bought us unexpectedly (for me at least) into the modern age.
Looking forward to day 5.
Yup! I almost posted this one first as sort of a “control” to explain what’s going on in the others, but per my brother’s advice posted them in chronological order. Not sure how I feel about that decision now. Hmmmm…
Love, love, love this voice. Very different from the previous, almost Biblical three. This piece has a more modern feel to it, and the word choice really highlights the character’s disdain for rainy days, from describing rain as “cloud sweat” to freaking out about the forecast.
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“Freaking out” is the perfect description! Thanks. ; )