Voice Week 2012: Wednesday

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Third voice for the prompt “rained out picnic.”

"Today my voice is ______."

Despite many earnest supplications sent heavenward, the weather banished any hope of their having the picnic. Dingy clouds ruffled the sky upon the bleak sunrise, bellowing grumbles tickled the hills at mid-morning  and by noon the whole countryside was dowsed in water and broken hearts. Consequently, large drops fell inside the house as well as out. She sat at the window sniffling, feeling rather betrayed. For though the Lord had promised Noah He would never again destroy the whole earth with rain, her world seemed wholly ruined.

What type of story does this feel like to you? When does it take place? Tell me in the comments!

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18 Comments

  1. Late Victorian novel or novella? Possibly a short-story.

  2. A bit of a Victorian, country village feel. Still have religion as a linking element beyond the rain.

  3. I love the imagery of the “dingy clouds”. Sorrow and misery is clear, but I’m getting a sense of an adolescent girl — someone who could view a spoilt picnic as being unanimous with a “wholly ruined” world.

  4. I’m not sure of time. Everyone is suggesting Victorian, but I’m not so sure about that. I still feel the spiritual/religious ties in the story and how every character is heartbroken in someway.

  5. I’m going with gothic literature – you’ve got enough pathetic fallacy here to fill a Bronte novel, and there’s heart-break thrown in too. Must be Emily!

  6. I get the image of this voice being a child, a young girl. Still that religious theme running through with the mention of Noah. Also the house/building she’s i is old, not in good repair (water coming in) – maybe an old convent?
    Intriguing.

  7. The way you set the scene up in the beginning is wonderful. I’m a huge fan of bleak, rainy days, though, and it’s interesting to see how it can ruin so many lives, if only for a moment. I also love the religious tone carried through these chilling, beautifully written pieces.
    =)

  8. Oh poor thing! This was poetic!

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