Voice Week 2012: Monday

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So it begins! I’m experimenting with third person voices this year, using “rained out picnic” as a prompt.

"Today my voice is ______."

In those days, men were corrupt, and rejoiced in their wickedness and reveled in violence. And as they were carousing in the field, there was a loud noise, and the sky grew dark. They were frightened, for they had never heard or seen such things. But some said that the gods were angry, and they began to search among them for a sacrifice. They seized a woman. But she took her knife and thrust it into the side of one of those who was trying to bind her. And the skies opened and water poured down. 

What type of story does this feel like to you? When does it take place? Tell me in the comments!

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Stephanie is an award-winning copywriter, aspiring novelist, and barely passable ukulele player. Here, she offers writing prompts, tips, and moderate-to-deep philosophical discussions. You can also find her on and Pinterest.
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  1. Interesting story, beKind. It feels almost biblical in tone, although I’m not sure the Bible would have “the gods” unless this was a section about some heathens. Can’t wait to see how else this story comes out over the next few days…

  2. this sounds Celtic, definitely some sort of pagan group. Rough, uncivilized to modern standards.

    My Voice week piece will be posted later tonight.

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  4. This is a revenge story. I like to think that the woman is a goddess, walking to the earth to taste the sin of man. Sevenfold punishment to ensue. The ancient pagan feel of the piece is very strong. however, to turn it on its head a little I like to think of this as a story being told far in the future, looking back to their interpretation of society today.

  5. The destruction of Sodom and Gomorrah came to mind as I read this. Biblical almost, as if from that time period (old testament) .

  6. Definite tones of primitive. These people are still in awe of the unknown, times are hard, only the fittest survive – sounds like this girl is a survivor.

  7. Reminded me of Gotham city! But Of course this is way before the times of Bruce Wayne!
    Back when Gods had direct access to worldly matters…

  8. The voice, as others have noticed, has a Biblical or codex flare to it. The question of whether or not anything supernatural is happening is wide open (it could be entirely mundane, or not) which I like. I had the inkling of an impression that it was taking place in the far-distant future, but it could also be a Great Flood myth.

  9. This is awesome! I absolutely love the style this was written in, and the perspective.
    I’d say it centers around an *old* civilization, based on their actions and beliefs.

  10. A great start to your Voice Week.
    This had a very biblical feel to it, I loved the first line, “In those days, men were corrupt, and rejoiced in their wickedness and reveled in violence.” You almost know that someone or something, somewhere, wants to sort this lot out.
    Can’t wait for the next voice.

  11. Even without the cure for cancer that would be enough to get me to buy it!

    Are you ready for your challenge?

  12. I really liked your take on this challenge. Each voice was so completely different (and also very good), It felt inter dimensional. You win, I think/

  13. I hope that is not maniacal laughter. Though, if you have cracked from the strain, the results should at least be of use in tracing your decent into madness. 😉

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